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I would like to end my email in relation to answering a job vacancy as "I look forward with anticipation" Kind regard Jackie (my CV will be attached)

Or should I say "looking forward to hearing from you" Kind regards Jackie The latter I feel makes an assumption they like what's said in my CV

Jackie Clark
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  • 'Look/ing forward' needs 'to ...'. – Edwin Ashworth Jul 03 '18 at 14:37
  • This sounds more like a philosophical question than a grammatical one. The first version needs some grammatical revision, but neither is more intrinsically better than the other. – ScottM Jul 03 '18 at 14:38
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    Not entirely sure how you can be looking forward without anticipation. Meaning to say, you have quite some pointless piling on of valedictions and verbiages there. Makes you sound fake and phony, is what it does. And also wastes the reader's time. Nobody cares what you do or do not look forward to. Least of all the poor people in HR that have to read that phony nonsense all day long. Don't be yet another person in that crowd they don't care about. Stand out by being genuinely polite and wonderfully concise. Say "Kind regards" and leave it at that. – RegDwigнt Jul 03 '18 at 14:52
  • Many words have been used in answer to my question, for which I am grateful but uneducated as to their meaning so I think I'll stick to regDwight's advice. – Jackie Clark Jul 03 '18 at 15:01

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The first one seems too formal and the second one is not a complete sentence. You can use the second one better, like:

Looking forward to your response,

Jackie

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  • I don't see how "Looking forward to hearing from you, (space) kind regards, Jackie" is not a complete sentence, but "Looking forward to your response" is? – aesking Jul 03 '18 at 15:05
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    @aesking My version isn't a complete sentence either, so I don't use it as a sentence in the body of my email nor put a period after it. Send-offs before signing your name, like "sincerely," are usually not sentences. I suggested that if she wants to use option 2, to use it like I did. Hope that clarifies things; sorry for the confusion. – jmrpink Jul 03 '18 at 15:11
  • Hi, both sentences are complete sentences, it's just an informal way of saying "I look forward to your response" with the subject omitted. See conversational deletion – aesking Jul 03 '18 at 15:24
  • Also pulled this from that answer: It is not good formal written style, except for reporting dialog in a story. – jmrpink Jul 03 '18 at 15:29
  • That is true. Personally, I am susceptible to beginning sentences with a gerund in letters too! I'm not sure what the convention is but, it's best to consider formality on a scale from extremely formal to extremely informal. Letters are usually in the middle. For example, in formal writing, it is recommended to not use contractions and such, but even the best people do it (unconsciously) and it's often overlooked. And I think it's becoming more acceptable to use contractions in academic essays. – aesking Jul 03 '18 at 15:37
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    I agree with everything you said. I would still suggest, because this letter is going to a potential employer, to err on the formal side of things. Thank you for showing me the conversational deletion by the way! – jmrpink Jul 03 '18 at 15:40
  • Hi Pink...another fix for block quote...please check out how i did it by clicking on the edit icon on the bottom of your Q. – Cascabel_StandWithUkraine_ Jul 03 '18 at 18:06