Shortening sentence by removing nouns repeating in clauses

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In the following sentence, a noun is repeated in each clause. The noun I refer to is assignment.

He is aware of the assignment, accepts the assignment and endeavours to fulfil the assignment.

Is it correct for me to write the sentence in a manner that shortens the sentence by writing the noun once per sentence rather than once per clause?

He is aware of, accepts and endeavours to fulfil the assignment.

Why complicate? The most important word here is "assignment", don't move it to the end. We have a pronoun specially for such a situation. "He is aware of the assignment, accepts it, and endeavours to fulfill it." Unless you are drafting a legal document, in which case, a proper legal "conveyancing" will be needed. — Kris, Jul 13 '18 at 12:26
@Kris The placement of the noun in the first clause and use of pronoun in subsequent clauses reads well. Your recommendation and explanation is appreciated. — Clarus Dignus, Jul 13 '18 at 15:35

score 1 · Accepted Answer · answered Jul 13 '18 at 11:24

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Absolutely. However, you will lose an emphasis on "the assignment" and to the reader, after having said "he is aware of the assignment" and then repeated assignment assignment assignment, we really get the picture that he sure is aware of that assignment.

answered Jul 13 '18 at 11:24

Paul Childs

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Thank you explaining that both are acceptable and that the only deciding factor is the intended emphasis of the noun. – Clarus Dignus Jul 13 '18 at 11:34
See also: my comment at OP. – Kris Jul 13 '18 at 12:26

Shortening sentence by removing nouns repeating in clauses

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