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However, the courts in Lundy held that because the landlords never seen the dog, nor received complaints about the dog, nor visited the property, nor knew the size or age of the dog, that the landlords were not aware of the dangerous propensities of the dog.

Elijah Jefferson
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  • It should be landlords had* never seen. It would also be more natural if you left out all of the nors, and replaced the final nor knew* with or *known. Last, the final comma after dog* should be removed. It's not a run-on sentence as much as it is unnaturally phrased. It would also sound better to replace the final the dog with a pronoun. – Jason Bassford Aug 06 '20 at 18:50
  • In other words: However, the courts in Lundy held that because the landlords had* never seen the dog, received complaints about the dog, visited the property, or known the size or age of the dog that the landlords were not aware of its dangerous propensities.* – Jason Bassford Aug 06 '20 at 18:53
  • Ok thank you very much! – Elijah Jefferson Aug 06 '20 at 18:58
  • If you're asking what a run-on sentence is, you can look at Is this DFW line a run on sentence? and Can you tell me what are “run-on sentences” exactly and why some people claim this blog post is unreadable?. It's not entirely clear if you were just looking for writing advice, or to understand the definition of the term. (But this question either becomes off topic or a duplicate of one of those.) – Jason Bassford Aug 06 '20 at 19:25
  • The word 'that' is better deleted: "because ... the age of the dog, the landlords were not aware." – Yosef Baskin Aug 06 '20 at 19:30
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    Actually, I would additionally move the last part of the sentence at the beginning, so as to make it easier to parse: However, the courts in Lundy held that the landlords were not aware of the dangerous propensities of the dog because they* had never seen it, received complaints about it, visited its property, or known its size or age.* – Jason Bassford Aug 06 '20 at 19:31
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    @YosefBaskin No, in that exact construction, the additional that should remain. Without it, the sense of the overall sentence is lost. It's needed because of the intervening text between the first part of the sentence and the last. However, my last comment that reconstructs the sentence removes that problem. – Jason Bassford Aug 06 '20 at 19:32

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